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Here is my Mystery Writer Story ... The Lost Soldier (P.S it has 1,515 words so it is quite long)
The Lost Soldier

“ Yes” said Sam John, a soldier in the Army sounding very joyful and excited that he had finished his final test to be a full Army soldier and fight at the next war.He had been training for months and he couldn’t wait to achieve his final test but, he did not know what would await him in the future.

It was the day, the day where he went to battle with all his fellow soldiers getting geared up ready to start a two day walk to the battlefield, armed with a deadly load of guns the soldiers weren’t afraid of anything.The base commander said a few words before they left, now the base commander was a rough, battered old man who had a lot of experience in being a full trained soldier, “I’d like to say a few words, if you soldiers pull of this battle you’ll all be able to go back to your homes proud that you fought for your home country, now good luck”.The soldiers started their long journey to the middle of Africa in and Oasis ready for what ever comes for them.

One day gone already striding through the jungle, the soldiers were wet and cold but they had too keep going, all of a sudden “Argggh” a cry of one of the soldiers we all ran to his assistance and found that he had been bitten by a deadly yellow back spider.This massive creature making its way back into its home leaving its victim almost dead.On of the soldiers went to find a useful mushroom that only grows in this part of the world he hurried back and squeezed the mushroom over the sting then he was bandaged up and kept on walking.

The second day, the soldiers arrived at the Oasis awaiting for there enemy, the Russians.They waited and waited until BANG shot of a rifle into one of the soldiers head it was clearly pin-point accuracy, blood spreading everywhere the next thing the soldiers knew they were caught in a cross-fire with tanks, helicopters and trucks everywhere, soldiers running in throwing grenades firing their rifles and M16’s killing all of the Americans and then the battlefield went silent with dead bodies and blood everywhere...they had been defeated.

The eyes of one soldier opened only one and believe it or not it was Sam John.”What happened” said Sam sounding scared and terrified, he stood up only to find that all he could see was a empty, endless Oasis.He looked around trying to find someone but no luck.Sam decided that he should go back to base and tell the commander about the helicopters, tanks and trucks and how they got defeated he started hid long two day walk back too base but, it wasn’t going to be easy. He was walking through the Oasis then he could see the jungle then he saw a pair of light green eyes emerge from a bush when he looked again they were gone.”Hello” he yelled but no one retuned a sound so he kept waking into a wet and cold jungle alone.As he marched through the forest desperate for food then he saw as banana tree, he climbed and climbed until he got to the top he heard sound then turned around to find the same pair of light green eyes he saw before it was a man only he on had a pair of damaged and worn shorts he was holding a knife a sharp knife ready to strike.He made a move and pushed Sam off the tree jumping down making a very strange sound Sam knew exactly what this was it was and outcast he looked like a gorilla and smelt and looked like one too striking his knife and cutting his face, this could be the end.As the outcast struck his knife again Sam grabbed his and and twisted it until it was broken.The outcast cried in pain falling to the ground disappointed that he had lost the battle, Sam tied his hands up with a bit of his t-shirt and started to interrogate the outcast into telling him where he was and who this strange frustrated man was.”Tell me your name”, the outcast looked scared then he laughed “he he he he he he he I have no name I was once a leader of the African tribe until a scruffy, unpleasant man stormed in and challenged me to fight over who would be the leader of the tribe ... he defeated me and I was banished from the tribe from that day until I die, so i’ve been out in the jungle for twenty three years now, I’am the Outcast”.Sam untied the outcast and told him never to attack a man if you know your going to get beaten.He ran out of sight back into the jungle.

Sam continued his journey back to base and with little water and no food he had to do it fast before this environment claims his life.He knew he had to find food and more water, so he went off task to search for food.In his search for food he went deep into the forest in and then he saw a banana tree, he ran up to the tree and climbed up it as fast as he could and picked about ten bananas and started to gobble them up until he started to feel drowsy and then the world went dark as Sam fell into a deep sleep.

He woke up only to hear people but they sounded like they had a accent while they were blabbering out some words Sam sat up and looked around and saw a bunch of people standing around him, of course these must be the tribe that the Outcast was talking about.Then everyone went silent as a big, tough, fearless man stormed through the crowd and said “Who are you and what is your business here, were you sent here to kill us”.Man sounded indian but how did indians end up here in the jungle “ANSWER ME” Sam said “I was sent here to for war to fight the Russians and we were defeated and i’am making my way back to my base so I can tell my commander about the deadly arsenal of weapons the Russians have, I’am Sam John”.The big man just stared at Sam and laughed then said “Ha you’ll be lucky if you get back to your base alive after i’m done with you, take him to the cells.

Sam sat quietly in his cell waiting for what would happen next then he heard the chief come to his cell “unlock him” he said then Sam got dragged out of his cell and got threw to the ground and kicked then Sam saw an exit out of the tribe, it was a broken fence and it lead into the jungle and away.He had to wait for the perfect moment to escape and he knew that would be now, he stood all normal and silent then the silence broke as Sam sprinted to the exit while three guards were chasing after him but the guards were a lot more tough and bulky.He jumped over boxes of bananas and left them on the ground so the guards would hopefully slip over them and it succeeded as the guards slipped and fell to the ground while Sam was still sprinting hard out and then he went through the fence and disappeared back into the forest.Sam slowed down to get some breath back then he went back on target to get back to base.He could hear them, Sam could hear his commander shouting orders. to the frightened trainees so Sam ran as fat as he could to get back to base and tell the commander that they had been defeated and that they would need more force, more vehicles, more tanks and more helicopters.He finally got back to base to see trainees training and it was the best sight he had seen since he had left here he ran to his tent only to find his pet cat cuddling up with a turtle and then “Sam” said a very familiar voice that Sam swore he had heard before then Timothy Jones a most faithful and reliable friend of Sam’s emerged from the corner of his tent.”Tim” said Sam “I haven’t seen you since I left this place” “How does it feel to be back” said Tim “Better than ever”.

Sam went to talk to the commander about the war and how they got defeated and how they would need more soldiers and more vehicles.The commander said “So the Russians had put a lot of thought into this war, well next time we’ll be ready then there was a bird squawking and it was the commanders parrot Sunshine and oddly enough it was carrying a teaspoon looking very mischievous.Then the commander said “Sam John I am now promoting you to the corporal rank for showing excellent survival skills. “Thank You sir”.

===Then we had to choose the Mystery writer and had to author it and then present it to the rest of then class then the mystery writer would choose the best story. All edits are in red. Here's my groups story:===

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Star wars  Illusions =====

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 It was Wednesday the 72th of Zobtober 3011 =====

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 I was so happy we were almost home, I looked out of the Stars Wars Tie Fighters  window beside me, =====

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 I new we had The Philosophers Stone, Ron had got it for us but Voldemorte had ended him. =====

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I woke up with sore back and cramp, as soon as my eyes had opened I heard the driver yell “Mayday, Mayday! were going down” the alert button next to me was flashing red and green, purple and blue,  I new this wasn’t a happy moment ,the Tie Fighter  was out of control it almost felt like there was lots of gravity,Then something unexpectedly tripped me <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">up and I laughed <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">. I woke up, I could Smell <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">pancakes <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> all around me something was defiantly wrong! I looked beside my my friend <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Charles <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I thought was okay but as soon as I tried to wake him up he rolled over, <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">and said “Wait where am I” <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">.Every one around me was dead <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">except Charles. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I've got to get out of here I said to my self, as I was trying to get out of busted <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Tie fighter <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I could smell gasoline, once I got out of the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Tie Fighter and <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I ran as fast as I could. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">A <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> big explosion behind me made me trip over and land on the sand head first. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I didn’t know were I was, some sort of deserted place in the middle of know where <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">but it was somewhere but i just didn’t no where <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Luckily I had a <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">green lightsaber <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> in my pocket, so <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">left <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> must be that way but the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">lightsaber <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> was every were I think was busted from <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">when I defeated General Grievos <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">, <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">O <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">h man how am I gonna get out of this one I said out loud,but then in the distance was something shiny, <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">it looked like a purple lightsaber crystal. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">As it got closer I began to see it more clearly, a bird whats a bird doing all the way out here oh no the illusions are already started <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I’ <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">v <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">e <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> only spent a couple of hours out here, But then then it dropped something on my head a <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">mini lightsaber teaspoon <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> in fact, I was so confused Ill just keep this just in case <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">i’ll have to defeat Darth Vader <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> well the good thing is that i’m not <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">a fully trained jedi y <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">et i muttered. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I was exhausted, the scorching hot sun was like as painful as a <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">lightsaber <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> going through my back Luckily i had 2 <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">hydrated pills letf <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I said to myself but when I looked in my pack =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> oh no both of my <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">pills <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> were almost <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">past their expiry date <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> oh no i’m gonna die out here but as I wiped the tears of <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">f <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> my nose I saw something else in the distance this time I definitely new I this was defiantly <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Mace Windu <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">, but I ran to <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">him <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> anyway thinking at least in my dreams something good was happening, a big pool of sparkling <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">banana milk <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I jumped in I was so happy to have <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">banana milk <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">, I filled up <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">on banana milk <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">, but then it felt dizzy for a moment and then the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">banana milk <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> had gone, It was just angrily i said to my self,but then I looked behind me the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">banana milk <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> was right there how could i have missed it? i said to myself.So i filled up <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">until I had to throw up <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> the top once i had finished i stumbled across these t lovely looking mushrooms,as my hand went out to grab them someone said “hay don't grab me!” what oh no talking mushrooms not again, Wait maybe they can help me get out of here. “well you may not no it but the rescue helicopter is for as we speak so better keep your ears and eyes out”. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> it was <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Obi-Wan Kenobi <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> looking for me, even though I had no energy i still ran towards <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">him <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> knew I was getting out of this nightmare. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> as the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">medical clone <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> were helping me on the <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Tie Fighter <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I stumbled to my knees not knowing that i had <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">came to my end, it was all over I had failed. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> “Wake up Wake up … now”. Oh my God it was Mum “Your gonna be late for the bus. =====

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<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> I was in real life because "I Opened Up My Eyes It Was Only Just A Dream" ... was what was on my radio alarm. When I got outside the Star Wars Tie Fighter was parked there instead of the bus … “OH NO” =====

Here's the winner for the mystery writers story:
By Ella, Joseph and PJ.

Illusions It was Tuesday 22 of July, 1995.

I was so happy we were almost home. I looked out of the helicopter window beside me, seeing all the smoke and fire underneath the chopper, I new we had won.

As I sat in the helicopter, I realised I had a very sore back and cramp in my legs. All of a sudden, I heard the pilot yell “Mayday, Mayday, were going down”. The alert button next to me was flashing red, and knew it wasn’t good sign. The chopper was going out of control as it shook furiously. It seemed like an anchor was grabbing hold of the helicopter and jerking it towards the ground.

I woke up. I was only inhaling the smoke from the burning petrol, as I breathed heavily. I rolled onto my side seeing the wreckage falling apart. Beside me, I spotted my friend Simmons lying with his head against the sand. As I looked at his face I saw blood trickling from mouth, and that was when I knew he was dead. His pale white skin and his lifeless body brought tears to my eyes as I walked away from his limp corpse.

Everyone around me was dead apart from the pilot who I found moaning with a broken neck in the remains of the crash. I tried all I could to help him but as the flames grew bigger, I knew he wouldn’t stand a chance. I felt rotten about leaving him but I knew I had to get out of here. I ran as fast as I could away from the destroyed chopper, trying to forget what had just happened. The big explosion behind me made me trip over and land face first into the sand. I picked myself up and kept running.

The only thing I could see was the sand dunes all around me, Making me feel drowsy. “Oh man, how am I gonna get out of this one” I said out loud,but then in the distance something shiny caught my eye. As it got closer I began to see it more clearly. The greens and yellows were making a vibrant rainbow, then I began to think. A bird? Whats a bird doing all the way out here? The bird then dropped something on my head. It must have been the shiny object that I saw earlier. It was a spoon. My head was throbbing so hard I didn’t realise how strange it was for a bird to be flying with a spoon in it’s talons.

I was exhausted. The scorching hot sun brought pain to back as though I had just been shot. Luckily I had my backpack with me, but it carried less than I needed. It contained two bottles of water both half empty, a compass full of sand and various bolts just in case the chopper broke down, but I didn’t need them any more so I dropped them in the sand and kept going.

I saw various mirages as I trudged, but as I ran up to them, I found that they were just fragments of my imagination. The sun was getting to my head, and maybe that’s where the budgies came from.

“Oh no I’m gonna die out here with no water”, I complained to myself, but as I wiped the tears of my nose, I saw something else in the distance. This time I was convinced it was real and not an illusion. As I ran up to it, it was almost like a dream come true. A big pool of sparkling water filled my vision as I jumped in. I was happy to have the shade of the oasis trees, but even more cheerful about the water. I filled both my drink bottles up to the brim, but then felt a sudden dizziness that made me drop to knees. As i did I spotted these amazing looking mushrooms on a near by tree trunk. I reached out to grab them and then got an enormous fright. Something yelled “ Hey, Don’t you put your dirty hands on me”. I realised it was the mushrooms talking. “ What greatness. Talking mushrooms.”I said as I grabbed them and scoffed them down.

I decided to leave the oasis, and try and find some civilization. As I though I saw a building in the distance, I started to sprint towards it. While doing it, I tripped hard and smacked my head on a rock.

As my eyes began to open, all I could see was the blank walls around me. A man in completely white clothing strolled through the door. He peered down at me and said “ You have been through quite a lot so we are going to keep you here for a while.” “No!” I objected. “ There were birds and spoons and. and mushrooms...”I muttered. “ There there. You have been through quite a lot for one life time and I think you will need to stay here with us at the National Mental hospital.” Oh know. I think the illusions have taken over.

Back in term 1 our school had it's swimming sports. Our teacher asked us to write a recount on it, here is mine:
<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">School Swimming Sports.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> On Wednesday the sixteenth of February 2011 my School had a fun day ahead of them and that was the Swimming Sports, the swimming sports is a day where most of our School do an event in the swimming sports and see if they get to go to inter-school depending on how hard they try.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> First we lined up in our house groups and sorted out who we were going to be buddies with and started to walk down to the pools, while we were walking we were sing our house chants.When we got there we got changed and sat down while our principal said a few words about the day.The we had to get ready for the first event which was one hundred metres freestyle of the pool.The people who where taking part in the event were already lined up ready and prepared first they started with the youngest and then all of a sudden BANG the loud cap gun when of signaling the swimmers to start so we started cheering for everyone especially the people who were in our house groups.After the swimmers got out tired well some were and ready for there next event it went on for the whole day cheering and shouting for everyone and then we did the house relays where all the best swimmers in the houses would swim for their house against all the other houses and they would swim to there best to try and win, it was very loud with everyone cheering for there houses to see who would win, the Tainui house came first but everyone swam really well.Then we did the widths event which was for those who weren’t that confident that they could swim a length and after that we had a quick free swim and everyone got changed ready to go back to school.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> We lined in our houses with our buddies and started walking back, when everyone got back to school they were exhausted knowing that they tried there hardest.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> By Sam. ===This is a fractured fairy tale that we had to write but what made it interesting was that we had to use one story line and four different characters from different fairy tale's ... This is mine and my partners fairy tale.===

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Pigerella <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Once upon a time there lived three pigs and they were sisters. Now two of the pigs were extremely ugly and horrible to everyone except one pig and that was the Prince of Pig Ville and he was called Prince Charming and they were so in love with him, but the third sister was shy an hardly ever talked and was called Pigerella and she was the cleaner for the pigs castle the ugly sisters were really mean to Pigerlla and she was really in love with Prince Charming but nobody knew because she kept it a very deep a secret.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Then one day Pigerella heard that there was a Pig Ville ball coming soon and her sisters were going to the Pig Ville ball to try and get a dance with the Prince and Pigerella was kept in the castle to scrub the toilet and that was the job she hated the most while the ugly sisters went to the ball …

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Then that night while Pigerella was siting there with a bucket of water on her knees scrubbing the horrendously smelly toilet wishing that she could go to the Pig Ville ball she caught a glimpse of a flash not very far away and then a Fairy came in to the toilet which scared her pork chops off. Pigerella said in a very frightened tone “Who - Who are you” then a very calm and peaceful voice answered back “I'm your Fairy God Mother” “And I’m going to help you get to the Pig Ville ball in time for the feast and the dance” “But how are you going to do that” protested Pigerella I have no fancy clothes or shoes and I'm not going like this and I’m surpossed to stay here and scrub the toilet” But then the Fairy God Mother bought out her wand and waved it at Pigerella and then flash Pigerella had all of a sudden got a pretty dress and glass shoes and then she heard some horses waiting to take here to the Pig Ville Ball.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> While the horses were trotting to the Pig Ville Ball Pigerella saw Price Charming welcoming quests to the ball and then he looked at Pigerella and then she was a bit shy about going but she plucked up her courage and when the horses stopped she stepped out of the carriage and walked through the big doors and into the castle. She was very shy and scared so she sat down only to find the ugly step sisters talking to Rumpelstiltskin, so Pigerella grabbed a glass of punch and some chips and sat down …

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> But then the big clock rang signalling that it was time for the Pig Ville dance at 10 o clock and then Prince Charming walked down the red carpet in search for a date and then he saw Pigerella and asked her to dance and all Pigerella had to say was “Yes” so she spent the best 30 minutes of her life dancing with Prince Charming and then disaster struck.She went to get a drink and then all of sudden flash her dress and shoes had mysteriously disappeared and she was back in her dirty clothes that she was wore for cleaning the toilet and as fast as she could ran out of the castle and she ran all the way home with Prince Charming sitting down sadly with no one to dance with so he decided to find his true love.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> The next morning he walked down to all the houses with no luck but there was one house left and that was Pigerella house, so he walked in and asked Pigerella’s mother to see if any of the sisters was his true love so he examined all three sisters and then he came to Pigerella and looked at her very carefully and then said “It’s you … you are my true love and you will come live with me in the castle for eternity. So they Pigerella and Prince Charming lived happily ever after. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> The End.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> By Sam and Lachie.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">This story was very well written and quite funny. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> There were a few spelling mistakes but mostly there were heaps of full stop mistakes. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Altogether this was a very well written story and good to read. Well done Lachie and Sam. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Liam He.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Good pictures. <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Good first, middle and end parts to the story <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> also funny i like the “which scared her pork chops off” <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> easy to understand as well <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Javier

Early this term (term 2) we had to write an exposition about something that we wanted banned or something we want to carry on ... Here's mine:
<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; line-height: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">__12.5.11__

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; line-height: normal; margin-bottom: 0pt; margin-top: 0pt; text-align: center; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> My Exposition: “Should barbed wire be banned”.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; font-weight: normal; line-height: normal; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;"> Barbed wire … disgusting piece of equipment if you ask me. What I'm showing you now is going to tell you my reasons of how I think barbed wire should be banned.

Here’s a picture of barbed wire:



Some people may think that barbed wire is a good way to keep farm animals in there paddocks, to my thoughts its not. Well yes it may save power from just using electric fences all the time, but what if they try and get out of their paddock and the fence is constructed from barbed wire they could get a large or deep cut that could possibly get infected. Most barbed wire I've seen on fences are rusty or dirty and if that gets into the cut it could lead to serious problems.

Secondly I think barbed wire should be banned because even humans can get a deep cut by it and that’s just no good, creating something that will hurt animals and humans. What just if a baby or a young child was walking around on a farm and cut themselves and at that young age that could lead to even more serious problems. ( The parents of that child would probably agree with what I’m writing now if that happened ).

My last reason is if you looking to get some meat from a pig, cow or sheep, they might just get a cut and from barbed wire and if that got infected your meat would turn out not very nice, that is unless they treat the cut immediately, that would probably be fine, but most owners aren’t there at the time when the animals hurt themselves.

Overall from all these reasons I have written down, I hope you agree with what I have written and join me in saying … <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 12pt; font-style: normal; vertical-align: baseline; white-space: pre-wrap;">__**BARBED WIRE SHOULD BE BANNED.**__

Quite early into this term (term 2) our teacher had asked us to write a report about whatever we wanted. I did mine on Snakes and I got a level 4P which I am really proud of. Here it is:
<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; vertical-align: baseline;">__23.6.11__ <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 18pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">My Report: Snakes <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">A snake is a reptile. They are related to the lizard which is also a reptile. It is a cold-blooded animal and is very common in most countries. Most snakes are poisonous while others just have a very nasty bite. There are over 2,900 species of snakes in the world. A snake can be as tiny as 10 centimetres long and can grow up to 8 metres long. They can also be all sorts of <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #6aa84f; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">colors.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> A snake has a long slender body that slithers along the ground. Since they have no legs they use their muscles and scales to do the moving. They move in a kind of wavy motion. You may not think that snakes have bones, well they do and they are called “vertebrae”. The snakes body is made up to about 100 - 400 vertebrae with even more ribs attached, that is what makes them so flexible. A human has 33 vertebrae 24 ribs. Snakes bodies are covered with loads of little tiny scales. The scales act like armour, they protect it skin when moving over rough surfaces like bark, rocks and the desert sand, they are also waterproof.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Snakes are found basically everywhere and basically every condition which include mountains, deserts, sea, rivers and even in the Arctic. The only places without snakes is New Zealand and Antarctica. Australia has the most poisonous snakes in the world. Snakes are even found near beaches in Australia which loads of people go every day.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> A snake is quite amazing due to what it can do. Did you know that a snakes usually swallow their prey whole, but the negative side is that it take quite a long time to digest depending on the size of the prey and the size of the snake. One of the species of snakes, the deadly Viper has been known to swallow prey 1.6 times its own body size. The venom of a King Cobra, the worlds largest poisonous snake can kill prey up to as large as a mighty Elephant. The Spitting Cobras can spit it’s venom from it’s fangs, their venom can spit for up to three metres. A snakes fangs are hollow so that they can hold there venom in their fangs. A snakes tongue that is shaped like a fork is not for tasting but for smelling unlike mammals.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> A Snake is a very awesome creature I think, because it has so many features that are so amazing about it.

=== This term (term 3) our teacher had announced that we all had to write a piece of narrative writing using some pictures t add to our writing. My narrative is called "The Grim's Revenge" and the main character is The Grim Reaper: ===

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Narrative Sept 2011

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">WALT: <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Write a piece of narrative writing

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> The Grim’s Revenge <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> By Sam

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> A long long time ago there lived The Grim. He was a powerful ghostly skeleton that wore a black tattered robe. Grim was sharpening his scythe when he heard a loud, piercing noise that rattled his brain (If he had any). He went to investigate in his swamp that was cursed <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">with lots of magical spells. There he saw a man that was dressed very nicely. The man looked tough b ut frightened so Grim went to scare theliving life out of him. Grim snuck up behind the man and said “WHO DARES ENTERS MY SWAMP” while holding his super sharp scythe. The man then said “THERE IT IS, GET HIM”. Then all of a sudden more men appeared from behind some trees and they all had pepper spray. Pepper spray would kill Grim instantly so Grim bought out his scythe and swung it at a man that pierced his body. Then the well dressed man fired his pepper spray and then Grim shouted “NOOOOOOOOOOO” and then in a single poof Grim had faded away and then found himself underground laying there.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> 20 years later a noise woke Grim, it was a loud mechanical noise that was coming from the surface. He bought out his scythe and cut his way through the ground until he found himself looking at people running to a particular spot and there stood the same man that had ambushed him in the swamp 20 years ago. He was waiting for the right moment to strike when Grim saw that the man had a picture of Grim and said “This ghost is no longer among us, me and my men killed him 20 years ago from now so we shall celebrate that triumph over the Grim Reaper. The Grim then was mumbling a few words and then he had successfully cursed the man with the bad luck curse. A man saw the hole that Grim had dug then Grim poked up his scythe and stabbed the man directly in the chest. The cry bought attention to the spot and there the man stood, <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> then the mans body guard said “Mr President, what could have killed him”. Then the so called president looked down the hole and saw a creature sway by. “I swear I saw something down there, have everyone search the area thoroughly” said the president. Grim had nowhere to hide, so asquick as he could Grim flew up and up until he was well hidden on top of a building. He peered down to the ground and watched the men and women searching for Grim. Grim had nowhere to hide, for now. “I will get revenge by killing the president” said Grim. Lightning was filling th e sky with Grim’s hatred. <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> It was night, Grim knew that this was the perfect opportunity to strike at the president but there was one problem, he didn’t know where the president lived. So he searched the vast sky that gleamed in the night sky. He searched and searched until he found rather <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">posh looking house that was guarded by tough and courageous looking men. Grim had to take out every single guard but very quietly. So Grim snuck up to one man who looked like he was very sleepy, so the Grim went right through the mans body like a ghost and stared directly into the mans eyes and sliced the man in half nice and quickly. After about 2 hours Grim had silently taken out every single guard but there was another problem, there were even more guards inside the house. Grim had to use spells but time them as perfect as he could to take them out. Then he had a perfect idea, use the control curse so that Grim could take control of one of the guards and with that guard Grim could take out every single one of them. So he muttered the words that needed to be said to make the control curse successful. Then he got a clear view of a guard and cursed the man. Then the Grim made the man bring out his gun and shoot all the men in the room as they all collapsed on the floor. Then Grim controlled the man to use his passcard to get to the presidents room. The Grim then just got rid of the man by slicing him with his powerful staff. Grim snuck up as quietly as he could next to the president and glared into his eyes with revenge and then ... “SPLAATTT”. Blood splattered everywhere as the president lay in his blood soaked bed, dead. Grim had got his revenge. Then the butler walked in and said “Mr President, your meal is …”. The butler stood frightened as he’ll ever be and then he said “Pl - Pl Please don’t hurt me I - I’ll do anything” and then the Grim thought and then an excellent idea “How about you make me king of this world?” protested Grim.

<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> 1 week later Grim was king of the world, everyone was afraid of him so they would do anything Grim asked them to do. He sat in his throne giving commands to the slaves of the world and he sat there thinking about what he could do more torture the slaves. Grim was finally happy in his life and **__<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">he __**<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 11pt; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> lived happily ever after while the people of the world suffered.

===This term (term 3) we all had to partner up with a buddy and create an animation on either Story Bird, Story Maker or Domo Animation. Me and my partner chose Domo Animation, its a great website and here is our animation:===

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Here is another animation that me and my partner made:
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